Jess stood on the damp grass at the edge of the lake. The orange glow was soothing, majestic, it filled her with an emotion she couldn’t understand or express. The watery surface reflected the sky. Two skies, two worlds. She wondered what it would be like down there in that upside-down world. That underworld. Would it be different from this one? Surely it couldn’t be any worse.
She walked in, the cold water felt good, like a punishment. There was nothing left for her here.
‘Jess… wait.’ His voice paralysed her.
I’m hoping he saved her before it was too late. Well written.
That’s up to you! Thank you.
I like it! You took a very different view from the photograph!
Another fantasy world!
Well done!
I always seem to end up in a fantasy world. Ha.
It’s just your ‘thing’ like mine is thriller!
I love it; was inside her head immediately!
Fabulous effort – keep it up 🙂
Thanks very much!
“The cold water felt good, like punishment.” Great line. Seems redemption is in the cards for her after all, though.
Thank you. I hope she does find redemption.
Love the topsy turvy world you’ve cooked up. Good one, Underworld Dweller
Thanks!
True cliff-hanger. Well done.
Thank you Sandra
Dear J.E.
That last line was game changer. Well written. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I look forward to more.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, I’m very happy to be here. Looking forward to taking part every week.
Jenny
Great use of the prompt. I liked the open but sharp end
Thank you
Looks like there was something – or someone – left after all.
Great flash!
Thank you. Yes, there is always hope.
Is he calling her back, or joining her…. Great story! 🙂
I wonder that too! 😊 Thanks for the lovely comment.
Hopefully he will help her see another way. Lots of emotion in the detail, well done!
Thanks Sascha. I hope he does.
I liked this very original take, you describe the emotions very well. “Surely it couldn’t be any worse” is a powerful line, as is “the cold water felt good, like a punishment.” Nicely written
Thank you for the lovely comment. You’re very kind.
You’re welcome! I’m looking forward to reading more of your fiction as you post it.
This was wonderfully written. Welcome to our fabulous group!
Cliffhangers are always welcomed…
Thank you! I like it here 😊
It just gets better the more you participate!
Ah, Dark…just as I like my stories! Thanks for the tale.
Scott
Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/10/31/reckoning-friday-fictioneers/
Thank you. And you’re very welcome. 😊
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