Great Escape

Mary-Jane placed her small bag of belongings in the little rowing boat that rocked on the lapping water at the edge of the jetty. She had brought her favourite things; her fluffball-topped pen, her unicorn notepad, and the jewellery box with the dancing ballerina.

She only had to make it to the island. One and a half miles of water, and the monsters would never catch her again.

She picked up the oar and paddled, firm and smooth, keeping her body low. A black shadow formed below her. A white light beckoned from the island.

Not much further.

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This piece was written for the Friday Fictioneers hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – Addicted to Purple.

Each week a photo prompt is given and the challenge is write a flash fiction piece of no more than one hundred words.

Find other Friday Fictioneer stories here.

Author: Jennifer Kennedy

Mother, teacher and writer. I love all my jobs but writing holds a special place in my heart. I hope you enjoy reading my short stories as much as I enjoy writing them!

42 thoughts on “Great Escape”

  1. Great story, with hints of hope through a lugubrious sense of foreboding. Did she make it to the island?
    Well done.
    Best wishes,

  2. Eerie story. The dark shape above her head. I’m assuming Dragon, but…
    And funny thing, I don’t see this as a young girl/child. More like a teen/early 20’s feel, for me.

  3. Well written; I like the way you use favourite possessions to let us know the approximate age of the girl. The monsters are more frightening for being nameless. You imagined well how the girl might think this was a way of escaping those threatening her.
    Awful that so many children flee from ill-treatment and abuse.

  4. First of all congratulations on being #1 on the Hollywood Squares of FFF authors this week.
    Excellent story. You built the tension well. We’re all pulling for her.

  5. Lots of points of tension, I thought: is she running away from someone or home -both.
    Of course we are left wondering if Mary-Jane will make it across the water.

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